Sunday 23 May 2010

Mid-life Reality (#fridayflash)

Jason's dream of being famous didn't shatter in an instant.  It crept away slowly through the years of performing in cheap taverns, meat-market nightclubs, and at friends' weddings.  One particular night, not long after Jason's forty-seventh birthday, the final remnants of his dream slunk away as he slept, without fanfare.

11 comments:

  1. Very much enjoyed this. Great short tale of the loss of dreams, and a cautionary one at that.

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  2. I like this. Short but powerful. It's an all too real occurence, the disappearance of that dream of fame and fortune.

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  3. Yikes, I have to admit this one hit a nerve with me. You certainly packed a lot into just a few sentences, even the title adds to the narrative. Great job.

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  4. "his dream slunk away as he slept"

    That's a gorgeous phrase on several levels. Well done.

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  5. Well written. Short, but packs a great punch. Sadly, I'm sure many have had this happen just as Jason did.

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  6. Spot on David. Really tight and beautiful flash. Sadly heading for that age myself, but haven't quite given up the dreams yet...

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  7. I think this will hit many a nerve - short, powerful, brutal. Great piece!

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  8. I wonder where the dream went. If it left, then it didn't cease to be. Jason's getting old, so he'd better get out and look for it. It might die out there, unattended.

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  9. Efficient and magnificent. Great posting.

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  10. precise and powerful like a laser!

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  11. He was dreaming the wrong dream, then.

    Last sentence is wonderful.

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