Thursday 1 July 2010

Panda Slippers (#fridayflash)

And then there was that time when we were late for church and Dad said everyone had to get in the car now, and Melody was still doing her hair because she fancied James the organist, but Dad said no, we're going now, and he made Melody get in the car wearing her Sunday best and her fluffy panda slippers. And she shouted at Dad all the way to church, and when we got there Dad told her she could stay in the car if she wanted, but no, she got out and strode into church ahead of us. "I'm sitting on my own," she shouted as she went in the church door, and she did, she walked up the aisle and sat on the front pew so Reverend Crawley could get the full benefit of seeing our father's cruelty. Mum was so embarrassed, but Dad said we all had to go in and act normal, which we tried our best, but then once we sat down Janie started crying because Melody wasn't sat with us, and Mum told her to hush, and then Reverend Crawley stood up at the front and welcomed everyone and said how nice it was that people nowadays feel comfortable coming to church just as they are, panda slippers and all. Mum blushed and Dad grinned, and we all knew that after church he'd get a good telling off. And he did, and that evening when we'd gone to bed there must have been a discussion because after that if Melody was late getting ready for church we'd just leave her behind at home.

12 comments:

  1. I wrote about a panda toy this week as well - does that make us zeitgeisty or something?

    I loved the stream-of-consciousness rhythm of this, it's breathless until the satisfying conclusion for Melody and she can breathe a sigh of relief

    marc nash

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  2. This story definitely resonates with me. My now-adult niece got out of the tub when she was about six and wouldn't get dressed. I threatened to wrap her in a blanket, put her in the car, and take her to the airport to pick up her parents "au naturel." She grudgingly complied.

    One question: When you wrote "wasn't sat" did you mean "wasn't sitting"?

    Nice slice-of-life story, David.

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  3. Great chatty tone to this, David. A sort of pleasant rambling.

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  4. I just really like the sitting-at-the-table-and- talking-with-a-friend tone to this.

    Now, I'm assuming that her slippers were not made of the battered panda in Marc's piece! :D

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  5. Loved the voice in this. Like someone pushing it all out in one breath. Good, amusing story!

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  6. Sounds like home. Really enjoyed it, David.

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  7. Yes, nice tone/voice to this, as others have commented. Quite enjoyable.

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  8. Very amusing. I think my mom once took my brother and sister to school in their pyjamas because they had refused to get dressed!

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  9. Love how this rambles along. Very entertaining.

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  10. Love the simplicity with which this is told, very affective, Gillian

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  11. I like the way the first sentence just kind of pulls you into the story. I also love the image of Melody sulking on the front pew in her panda slippers.

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  12. Love the narrative voice, the telling of what must be a familiar tale to this family. Really tight writing and lovely sense of characters.Wonderful!

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