tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4518877017463523115.post9039575931115864413..comments2023-03-27T00:22:53.511-07:00Comments on Truant Pen: War Widow (#fridayflash)David Mastershttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12809185582216906363noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4518877017463523115.post-59755214737730857022010-04-12T14:50:39.740-07:002010-04-12T14:50:39.740-07:00Interesting paradox here where your character says...Interesting paradox here where your character says 'I have my own voice,' but of course she doesn't, there is only the author projecting his thoughts on to her, or conveying them through her. <br /><br />In fitting with the theme of voices, should the last line read 'how dare you speak *for* me,' rather than 'of me'?little madamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00125734524537783888noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4518877017463523115.post-71084970856791033262010-03-22T03:53:37.523-07:002010-03-22T03:53:37.523-07:00Full of power and anger. Excellent voice.Full of power and anger. Excellent voice.Lauritahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03688820247531607677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4518877017463523115.post-88197277550583321012010-03-21T19:59:50.324-07:002010-03-21T19:59:50.324-07:00So angry. Powerful use of language.So angry. Powerful use of language.Cat Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14160039271069426174noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4518877017463523115.post-1886103807949757292010-03-21T14:46:07.301-07:002010-03-21T14:46:07.301-07:00Ooh there's a challenge to all of us in this. ...Ooh there's a challenge to all of us in this. Not just the arms traders but all of us who work for peace too. "How dare you speak of the God of the oppressed?" And how do you ever cope with such a trauma as this.<br />Great stuff.Virginia Moffatthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12071059148315715405noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4518877017463523115.post-53565950149684925082010-03-21T06:49:49.279-07:002010-03-21T06:49:49.279-07:00There's a definite raw energy about this piece...There's a definite raw energy about this piece which I really like. Great stuff!Samhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00361651251233078437noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4518877017463523115.post-41223879890074973222010-03-21T04:51:05.514-07:002010-03-21T04:51:05.514-07:00Absolutely visceral, David, nice work.
The first p...Absolutely visceral, David, nice work.<br />The first paragraph was particularly good, her anger and the scene perfectly setmazzz_in_Leedshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01498100483681096442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4518877017463523115.post-55678189141192419272010-03-20T20:31:03.914-07:002010-03-20T20:31:03.914-07:00Angry, like taking a hard bite of something and sp...Angry, like taking a hard bite of something and spitting it out unchewed. And who can blame her.<br />Very fine, David, very fine.Cathy Olliffe-Websterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12729578896443750402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4518877017463523115.post-54526500787564453242010-03-20T14:33:29.241-07:002010-03-20T14:33:29.241-07:00Very powerful and raw. Excellent.Very powerful and raw. Excellent.Laura Enohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09982794146667832204noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4518877017463523115.post-5345274864255552972010-03-19T10:45:18.404-07:002010-03-19T10:45:18.404-07:00Yes, this is quite powerful, with a voice that is ...Yes, this is quite powerful, with a voice that is unrelenting. Well done!Christian Bellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03160609304010597116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4518877017463523115.post-84425984905865619752010-03-19T10:43:23.967-07:002010-03-19T10:43:23.967-07:00Wow, very powerful piece. Well written.Wow, very powerful piece. Well written.Eric J. Krausehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774468607814244185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4518877017463523115.post-41884544198111657772010-03-19T08:08:16.198-07:002010-03-19T08:08:16.198-07:00Riveting piece, this. Raw, hard look at the people...Riveting piece, this. Raw, hard look at the people behind the story.<br /><br />Yes. How dare us.<br /><br />Excellent.Marisa Birnshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17945909737147497606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4518877017463523115.post-2265919492534012872010-03-19T02:31:29.276-07:002010-03-19T02:31:29.276-07:00Excellent notions of the language used to obfuscat...Excellent notions of the language used to obfuscate the fleshy horror of war and reduce it to bureaucratic 'collateral damage' and requisition forms etc. And of course rape is all about power and domination and not sex. Women civilians are increasingly being attacked as a conscious military strategy to weaken the resolve of the population under attack. <br /><br />That last line sums everything up so succinctly.<br /><br />marc nashSulci Collectivehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03293833259808943096noreply@blogger.com